Can you please critique my presentation?

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Ok so i've spent the whole day doing this! And after WMM crashing about 5 times i've got it done!
In a couple of week i have to give a presentation to a group of people who might be interested in organising to bring children to our new animal assisted learning programme, and to help out at mossburn.
I have to say how i started coming to mossburn and what i get out of it, what keeps me coming back.

I've made this video to accompany my presentation, it's supposed to be more about the people side of things than the animals, although obviously they're a big part. So i've split it into two, with the animals first, then the 2nd song is what i get out of Mossburn, and what hopefully the kids will get out of it too.

So please can you spare 5 minutes and watch it and see what you think? Any improvements i could make? OR any suggestions for better songs?

Thanks!

http://www.livevideo.com/video/298F2CDA3A7C4DCF8DAE4490ACFB1434/mossburn-presentation.aspx
 
I think Leona's song at the beginning worked well because animals are there for you and won't ridicule you or your problems.
You may well have already included it and I've forgotten but animals teach you to have responsibility because they reply on you completely to look after them. Learning to be responsible for your actions is something that is very important as people go through their lives.
 
The first section lost my attention quite quickly. It had no focus and it appeared to be just a random selection of photos. The second section was very good, well thought out and interesting. One small point however, I found the red lettering difficult to see against some of the pictures and just as I was working it out it changed.
 
sorry.. I haven't watched it ALL... but I watched the beginning, the middle and the end!

I agree that the second part with the captions is really very good, but the first part is lacking any explanation, unless you intend to talk over it? But then you wouldn't hear the music.
Could you put some captions over the first pictures ? Perhaps the sort of opposites of the 2nd phase captions..?
 
thanks Ifield! yeah i got responsibility in there somewhere lol.

magicgirl thanks, yeah i did think it was a bit long but i wanted it to last the song (i already cut the first half of the song off), otherwise the two sections won't be split by songs, do you think i should cut the first song more and take some pictures out, or take the pictures out and just let the two sections not be split by the songs? I can change the colour of the letters, what colour would work best, white?

yeah thanks for the song suggestion ischa!
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thankyou didiR, i'll cut the first section down a bit. What kind of captions do you mean?
 
I thought the second half with the captions was great, the first half was a little bit dull, lovely photos and the animals looked really well, but it didn't really say anything.

looks a great place tho.
 
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