help - i'M RUBBISH AT THIS

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i DONT WANT TO GET INTROUBLE FOR ADVERTISING, BUT I AM RUBBISH AT WRITING ADS USUALLY THEY SOUND ABSOLUTLEY (sorry caps was stuck on!) naff!!


so please tell me what this pony sounds like to you have i got accross that she needs work. I had to write the ad for a friend as she's not very pc -able!

I'm not trying to make anyone buy her, i just don't want my friend to get loads of unsuitable phone calls.

sooo.......... Megan (the devil pony)'s ad
 
didn't notice the age (presuming its the first ad on page), that would be one of the first questions asked.
 
Oh sorry found age and height on first page but always worry when they say no jockey ,how is it going to be tried ,do you expect a stranger to get on, if anything happens to that person and you are not up front about things you would be liable so be careful. why are you calling it devil pony???????????
 
I call her the devil pony as we don't really get on, it's a bit of a joke really and the name has stuck as she's not really very Megan like!!

My friend and I both have youngster TB's under 6 and have our hands full, she gets called devil pony as we have to fetch her, muck her out etc. and have no time to spend quality time getting her right.

My friends mum took her on as she felt sorry for her when her last owner (small child) lost confidence with her, she was a novice small child new to riding and Megan was her first pony. Child now won't go near or get on pony so friends mum brought her here to try to sell on (small childs mum not v horsey) to get some money back from buying megan.

She has been messed around and needs someone to spend time with her and get her going again as she is nappy at the mo. Thank you for all your messages they are all helpful.

what would you write for an advert for her?
 
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always worry when they say no jockey ,how is it going to be tried ,do you expect a stranger to get on, if anything happens

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Tricky one as me and my friend could ride it but we both have a youngster each, I meant that no had time to ride her full time, does that make sense
 
TBH I would put that she was bought for a total novice and want suitable. Say lack of time and space forces sale. That she's done very well in the past.
Point out her good points, ie if she can be shown or what her movement's like, and that she would suit an experienced child or adult.
 
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