help with ad please

[immybrookstud]

ok i know, but you are so good at wording ad's and i really need to sell this boy. i've given up riding that was the plan for him, and i have no where to keep him, my boys are settled and dont think they would take a new comer well into there batcher herd. an he cant stay in cornwall so desperatly needs a new home
. i know pics dont help but im in bristol he is in cornwall so is a bit differcult

http://www.horsemart.co.uk/AdvertRef/HM8...HorseDetail.asp

 

[pelly]

Id say Block Capitals when metioning his breeding, may help as it "catches the eye" and stands out more

 

[JM07]

have you any up to date pics??

he looks really woolly there!

i just sold a Sec C to Truro in Cornwall from bath..they must have driven passed yours!!!

 

[pixie]

also, I'd get some decent, more recent photos.

 

[jewel]

could the breeder not take some more photos, if he wasn't a colt i would have him

 

[JessPickle]

Also would maybe remove stud website, private advertiser and that for me makes it seem like a dealer