Help with writing an ad please

[Fazzie]

Hey, wondered if any one could read my advert and see what you think before I put it up.

16 hand 9 Year old TB bay mare, a complete sweetheart.
Has raced and now used as a happy hacker. Will hack alone and in comapany and is a lovely safe ride, happily canter/gallop in a group without getting fizzy.
Very bold jumper, would make an excellent cross country horse, enjoys hunting.
Very good in all ways and fantastic in traffic.
Sad sale of a very special mare.

should i put anything else in there? ive put bold jumper, because she is fab and will jump everything, but she hasnt been over jumped just on occasional hacks and we see some good jumps.
she is a real sweetie and so laid back.
cookies and tea for everyone

 

[diggerbez]

i quite like it- sounds like a real sweetie and i think would attract the right kind of person for her. if you want to sound more 'professional' / need to cut your word limit you could try

16 hands bay mare, TB ex-racer, 9 years old. Fun and safe hack alone and in company for novice or experienced rider. 100% in traffic. Loves to jump, potential XC or hunt. 100% box, clip, shoe (obviously edit if she's not!). Very sad sale of much loved horse.

 

[Fazzie]

Thank u

she absolutely loves hunting bless her
i never like riding anything other than my 14 hand coblet, but she is just a sweetheart and i feel so safe on her.
i was so surpirsed that she didnt get fizzed up cantering and galloping with other horses, i want her but cant have so many horses

got to try and be sensible.
shes my friends horse i think he's mad selling but he works full time and has to keep 2 other tbs racing fit for point to pointing in the next few months so it'll be too much and shes too good to waste

 

[diggerbez]

i'm sure she'll get a nice home for her. i have an ex racer and he's fab, love him to pieces. he's a great happy hacker but does have his 'moments' (admitedly mostly with my sharer when he's decided to take the piss really!

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[Fazzie]

oh love him

my coblet is like that, he must test everyone to ensure he knows how far he can push the boundaries!! then continue with this everyday just incase your too tired/fed up/in an easy going mood to tell him off

i just wish i could have her as well as coblet

hes selling other one as well , its so horrible selling them