AprilBlue
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okayyy, so i was REALLY REALLY bored and i had nothing to do so i decided to write a mini story about a horse. i dont know whether i should carry it on or not. any ideas on how to improve it or something???
here we go........
Chapter One:
Mercury
It was dark all around me and my only light source was the beaming moon glowing beside me. A cold wind blew in my face as it drove through my hair excitedly. I stood there in the middle of a moonlit beach wearing a beautiful cream floral dress. I felt a peculiar feeling craving inside me till suddenly I heard something strange. The sound of a horses hooves trotting slowly along the shore along with a loud nicker; it wasn’t a normal nicker though; a familiar nicker, one that I’ve heard before. Then I knew it was him. He made several gentle splashes as a thin layer of seawater covered his elegant legs as the salty waves rocked back and forth. Suddenly the hoof beats became louder and slower till gradually they stopped. Everything remained quiet and all I could hear was the sweet sound of the tide rumbling next to me. Before I knew it, a startling neigh echoed around me. Then more hoof beats, faster ones. I looked all around me trying to find him but there were no signs. Nothing.
Suddenly I felt a gentle nudge as a warm handful of breath settled quietly on my shoulder. I looked behind me and saw him; it was definitely him, no doubt. My beloved stallion, Mercury. Just with my first look I noticed how unique he actually was. As his blackened hooves were as shiny as the stars, his long jet black mane danced wildly in the wind; almost like some sort of black coloured flames. I realised that no horse would ever look like him; even the ones beyond my dreams.
I stroked his soft neck and twirled a part of his mane around my finger, just as I used to do to him. He nudged me to his back, urging me to get on him. I reached my hand out and I grabbed his mane pulling myself up on the way. I pushed him into a smooth gallop but I felt that he was knew where he was going. Was he leading me somewhere? Suddenly Mercury turned to a brisk halt.
Before I knew it, I found myself and Mercury in the middle of nowhere till then I realised that we were standing outside a dark cave covered with green moss as it was towing over me and Mercury. I started to wonder why Mercury took me here but all of a sudden, Mercury started stamping his hooves hardly on the wet sand. He seemed frustrated and uncomfortable. He went tense. Suddenly Mercury started side-stepping anxiously, tossing his head up. But then he plucked up his courage and fearfully started to approach the cave slowly.
Chapter Two:
Solana
I glanced around the cave desperately looking for any trace of light but all I could see was a pitch black cloud enveloped around me. I heard drops of water dripping eerily beside me as the strong smell of sea water filled all the oxygen that I breathed in. I felt trapped inside the cave and I desperately wanted to get out. Without me knowing, an army of small bats swooped above my head. Despite being young and fresh, Mercury had a very calm temperament ― a wonderful trait he’d inherited from his dam Solana which meant Sunshine in Spanish since she had Spanish Bloodlines.
Solana used to be my mother’s old horse. In her heyday, Solana used to compete all around the world in dressage competitions and won pretty much most of them. She had an extravagant extended trot which made her look as if she was barely touching the ground. Her neck was naturally in an outline and her canter was light and was beautiful to watch. In fact she was my mother’s favourite horse. She was a special mare and she always had a kind sparkle in her dark brown eyes.
Till one night I heard some hooves stomping hard on the ground. I just thought some of the horses were startled by something random and spooked. It wasn’t that much of a big deal so I tried to get back to sleep. The stomping carried on for some time. Then I could hear whinnying and neighing. It seemed to be coming from the field where Solana was grazing. I listened quietly to what was going on till I heard a deep male voice shouting, ‘The bloody beast kicked me in the leg! Dave, grab her! I’ll show her what hell means!’ A startled neigh was let out till I heard a loud ‘THWACK!!’ as if something was being hit by something really hard. Then a loud ‘BANG!!’ was let out. It sounded like a gun had been fired. Suddenly all went silent. I had to see what was happening but I couldn’t go alone at a time like this. I knew mother wouldn’t be very impressed at me for waking her up at 2:30 in the morning to check something that probably didn’t happen but I sensed that something was wrong and I had to investigate it.
I ran out down the corridor as fast as I could and I entered my mother’s room. The walls were mainly decorated in pictures of mother winning competitions and things like that but I knew that this was not the right time to stare at pictures. I ran to my mother’s bedside and eventually woke her up. She groaned lazily and said, ‘What’s wrong darling, you shouldn’t be up at this time.’ ‘I think it’s Solana. She’s in trouble.’ I replied. Mother’s eyes sprung open and her face looked shocked. Immediately she ran out of bed and rushed for the door leading to the stable blocks and pasture. I followed her. Holding mother’s hand tightly. We finally approached the field and saw a jet black horse, lying lifelessly on the grass. The horse had blood trickling all down her leg. It was Solana. Mother ran over to the horse and kneeled beside her. Solana didn’t even move. Her eyes were barely open but she was still breathing. Mother grabbed her phone and called the local vet. He said that he would come as fast as he could so all we could do was wait. Mother stroked Solana’s neck calming the horse down. ‘Go get a warm, wet flannel or just grab anything to cover up her leg! Hurry up!’ I dashed as quickly as I could and a few moments later I was back in the field. Mother placed the flannel on Solana’s leg gently and started crying. A hot tear ran down my face as well the mare looked as if she was in a lot of pain. Solana’s eyes started to look droopy but I knew she wouldn’t give up. She wasn’t like that. Suddenly I saw bright lights appear and I heard the door of a car shut. It was the vet. He came just in time.
Suddenly, I was reminded. Where was Mercury? He was an energetic, twig – legged foal that could get lost easily. He was renowned for being mischievous! My eyes darted round the pasture searching for him. I started panicking. Something nudged me. I turned around in shock till a great wave of relief came to me. It was Mercury. I checked him over for any signs of injury but all was fine. All I had to worry about was Solana. Will she survive?
‘Go to bed darling, you will be tired in the morning. Just tie Mercury here and have a rest. Solana is in safe hands now that the vet has come so there is nothing to worry about. She will be okay.’ Mum had a doubtful look on her face, ‘I hope.’
I had to give in. Mum was already stressed out and as much as I wanted to stay I had to let reality hit me that the best thing that I could do was leave. I gave Solana one last pat and started walking back home, tears rolling down my face I couldn't help but think if I would ever see Solana again.
In the morning i recieved the news. It turned out the opposite from what i wanted, Solana had passed away.
Chapter 3:
Light
Mercury just carried on walking gracefully. Suddenly I saw a small but bright dot getting bigger and bigger the further and deeper we went into the cave. Light.
here we go........
Chapter One:
Mercury
It was dark all around me and my only light source was the beaming moon glowing beside me. A cold wind blew in my face as it drove through my hair excitedly. I stood there in the middle of a moonlit beach wearing a beautiful cream floral dress. I felt a peculiar feeling craving inside me till suddenly I heard something strange. The sound of a horses hooves trotting slowly along the shore along with a loud nicker; it wasn’t a normal nicker though; a familiar nicker, one that I’ve heard before. Then I knew it was him. He made several gentle splashes as a thin layer of seawater covered his elegant legs as the salty waves rocked back and forth. Suddenly the hoof beats became louder and slower till gradually they stopped. Everything remained quiet and all I could hear was the sweet sound of the tide rumbling next to me. Before I knew it, a startling neigh echoed around me. Then more hoof beats, faster ones. I looked all around me trying to find him but there were no signs. Nothing.
Suddenly I felt a gentle nudge as a warm handful of breath settled quietly on my shoulder. I looked behind me and saw him; it was definitely him, no doubt. My beloved stallion, Mercury. Just with my first look I noticed how unique he actually was. As his blackened hooves were as shiny as the stars, his long jet black mane danced wildly in the wind; almost like some sort of black coloured flames. I realised that no horse would ever look like him; even the ones beyond my dreams.
I stroked his soft neck and twirled a part of his mane around my finger, just as I used to do to him. He nudged me to his back, urging me to get on him. I reached my hand out and I grabbed his mane pulling myself up on the way. I pushed him into a smooth gallop but I felt that he was knew where he was going. Was he leading me somewhere? Suddenly Mercury turned to a brisk halt.
Before I knew it, I found myself and Mercury in the middle of nowhere till then I realised that we were standing outside a dark cave covered with green moss as it was towing over me and Mercury. I started to wonder why Mercury took me here but all of a sudden, Mercury started stamping his hooves hardly on the wet sand. He seemed frustrated and uncomfortable. He went tense. Suddenly Mercury started side-stepping anxiously, tossing his head up. But then he plucked up his courage and fearfully started to approach the cave slowly.
Chapter Two:
Solana
I glanced around the cave desperately looking for any trace of light but all I could see was a pitch black cloud enveloped around me. I heard drops of water dripping eerily beside me as the strong smell of sea water filled all the oxygen that I breathed in. I felt trapped inside the cave and I desperately wanted to get out. Without me knowing, an army of small bats swooped above my head. Despite being young and fresh, Mercury had a very calm temperament ― a wonderful trait he’d inherited from his dam Solana which meant Sunshine in Spanish since she had Spanish Bloodlines.
Solana used to be my mother’s old horse. In her heyday, Solana used to compete all around the world in dressage competitions and won pretty much most of them. She had an extravagant extended trot which made her look as if she was barely touching the ground. Her neck was naturally in an outline and her canter was light and was beautiful to watch. In fact she was my mother’s favourite horse. She was a special mare and she always had a kind sparkle in her dark brown eyes.
Till one night I heard some hooves stomping hard on the ground. I just thought some of the horses were startled by something random and spooked. It wasn’t that much of a big deal so I tried to get back to sleep. The stomping carried on for some time. Then I could hear whinnying and neighing. It seemed to be coming from the field where Solana was grazing. I listened quietly to what was going on till I heard a deep male voice shouting, ‘The bloody beast kicked me in the leg! Dave, grab her! I’ll show her what hell means!’ A startled neigh was let out till I heard a loud ‘THWACK!!’ as if something was being hit by something really hard. Then a loud ‘BANG!!’ was let out. It sounded like a gun had been fired. Suddenly all went silent. I had to see what was happening but I couldn’t go alone at a time like this. I knew mother wouldn’t be very impressed at me for waking her up at 2:30 in the morning to check something that probably didn’t happen but I sensed that something was wrong and I had to investigate it.
I ran out down the corridor as fast as I could and I entered my mother’s room. The walls were mainly decorated in pictures of mother winning competitions and things like that but I knew that this was not the right time to stare at pictures. I ran to my mother’s bedside and eventually woke her up. She groaned lazily and said, ‘What’s wrong darling, you shouldn’t be up at this time.’ ‘I think it’s Solana. She’s in trouble.’ I replied. Mother’s eyes sprung open and her face looked shocked. Immediately she ran out of bed and rushed for the door leading to the stable blocks and pasture. I followed her. Holding mother’s hand tightly. We finally approached the field and saw a jet black horse, lying lifelessly on the grass. The horse had blood trickling all down her leg. It was Solana. Mother ran over to the horse and kneeled beside her. Solana didn’t even move. Her eyes were barely open but she was still breathing. Mother grabbed her phone and called the local vet. He said that he would come as fast as he could so all we could do was wait. Mother stroked Solana’s neck calming the horse down. ‘Go get a warm, wet flannel or just grab anything to cover up her leg! Hurry up!’ I dashed as quickly as I could and a few moments later I was back in the field. Mother placed the flannel on Solana’s leg gently and started crying. A hot tear ran down my face as well the mare looked as if she was in a lot of pain. Solana’s eyes started to look droopy but I knew she wouldn’t give up. She wasn’t like that. Suddenly I saw bright lights appear and I heard the door of a car shut. It was the vet. He came just in time.
Suddenly, I was reminded. Where was Mercury? He was an energetic, twig – legged foal that could get lost easily. He was renowned for being mischievous! My eyes darted round the pasture searching for him. I started panicking. Something nudged me. I turned around in shock till a great wave of relief came to me. It was Mercury. I checked him over for any signs of injury but all was fine. All I had to worry about was Solana. Will she survive?
‘Go to bed darling, you will be tired in the morning. Just tie Mercury here and have a rest. Solana is in safe hands now that the vet has come so there is nothing to worry about. She will be okay.’ Mum had a doubtful look on her face, ‘I hope.’
I had to give in. Mum was already stressed out and as much as I wanted to stay I had to let reality hit me that the best thing that I could do was leave. I gave Solana one last pat and started walking back home, tears rolling down my face I couldn't help but think if I would ever see Solana again.
In the morning i recieved the news. It turned out the opposite from what i wanted, Solana had passed away.
Chapter 3:
Light
Mercury just carried on walking gracefully. Suddenly I saw a small but bright dot getting bigger and bigger the further and deeper we went into the cave. Light.
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