So, if I was writing an advert for a pony...

[maya2008]

Not used to doing this, first kids' pony to sell and I normally keep all mine. Is it allowed to ask if I can pm the ad to anyone willing to look at it and give feedback? Or does anyone know any Facebook groups that would give feedback on advert wording?

 

[JackFrost]

Not used to doing this, first kids' pony to sell and I normally keep all mine. Is it allowed to ask if I can pm the ad to anyone willing to look at it and give feedback? Or does anyone know any Facebook groups that would give feedback on advert wording?

I'm happy to.

 

[Merry neddy man]

Don't bother with Facebook!!! There are some excellent people on the forum who will offer their services shortly, I'm sure you'll recognise some of their names and know who to PM to.

 

[minesadouble]

I'm happy to take a look.

I sold our lovely pony, and bought an equally lovely bigger pony, via a wanted advert on PC ponies so it may be worth a browse of the wanted ads before you put yourself through the drama of a for sale ad.

The lady I contacted about the pony I had to sell was happy to wait a couple of weeks while I made sure my daughter gelled with her new one. He got a super home and I get regular updates about his progress with his new jockey.

 

[Ample Prosecco]

I am also happy to. I have generally not struggled to sell any of mine.

 

[maya2008]

I have pm’d those who kindly offered. Feel free to completely rewrite it if necessary !

 

[ycbm]

I'm happy to help. I don't know much about selling ponies but I'm reasonably good at spotting what people might wrongly read into adverts.
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[IrishMilo]

Just state basics + brief desc. of what pony has done. The adverts that are 10 paragraphs long just lose me and I don't even bother reading

12.2, 9 year old Welsh B.

Been used as a PC pony for the past 3 years, excellent in traffic and good to shoe, clip, box. Super confidence giver, no buck, bolt, rear or spook.

Would suit a small child looking to do local shows, hacking and pop some small jumps in the school.

No stable vices.

Price + location.

Easy!

 

[Patterdale]

Im happy to look.
I am unfortunately VERY experienced at reading pony ads

 

[maya2008]

Im happy to look.
I am unfortunately VERY experienced at reading pony ads

Have messaged the (by now rewritten a million and twenty times) advert!

 

[maya2008]

Just state basics + brief desc. of what pony has done. The adverts that are 10 paragraphs long just lose me and I don't even bother reading

12.2, 9 year old Welsh B.

Been used as a PC pony for the past 3 years, excellent in traffic and good to shoe, clip, box. Super confidence giver, no buck, bolt, rear or spook.

Would suit a small child looking to do local shows, hacking and pop some small jumps in the school.

No stable vices.

Price + location.

Easy!

Not so easy when they are young, and talented so if you say what they CAN do it looks like you drilled them, but actually you unpacked the ‘box’ and it came like that, everything preinstalled. If she was only a hand bigger, or we had fewer ponies… or my kids would let me send her away to be sold (my preference). Instead, I sit here agonising about advert wording and worrying about finding her the right child!

Part of me still thinks it might be easier to keep her until she actually is going BSJA and has a record. That involves training the child not to mess up though - she’ll stop if he messes up at the moment because she’s 4 and she follows instructions, even if they’re the wrong ones!!!

 

[WelshD]

I write a lot of for sale and wanted adverts for people. let me know if I can help

 

[FinnishLapphund]

Not so easy when they are young, and talented so if you say what they CAN do it looks like you drilled them, but actually you unpacked the ‘box’ and it came like that, everything preinstalled. If she was only a hand bigger, or we had fewer ponies… or my kids would let me send her away to be sold (my preference). Instead, I sit here agonising about advert wording and worrying about finding her the right child!

Part of me still thinks it might be easier to keep her until she actually is going BSJA and has a record. That involves training the child not to mess up though - she’ll stop if he messes up at the moment because she’s 4 and she follows instructions, even if they’re the wrong ones!!!

I like what your wrote at the end. Why not try and mix that with IrishMilo's suggestion, perhaps something like:

Promising 4 year old, height, breed.

Kind, follows instructions, both when they're right and wrong, only stops if rider really messes up. Good to shoe...