volatis
Well-Known Member
I am going to put an advert on Horsequest for a yearling filly and wondered if anyone would give me any feedback on the way I've written it and if there is anything I should change or take out or add in if you dont mind.
Using these two pictures http://good-times.webshots.com/photo/2999997210061358009wZGiKn and http://good-times.webshots.com/photo/2968952710061358009wqhLtj
and this is the text I was going to send
Heading: VOLATIS COSMOPOLITAN
Breeding: Sire Festivo (Westphalen) (By Fidermark x Flin Flon)
Dam Cover Girl (Trakehner) (By Guter Stern x Caro-Dame)
2007 Bay filly to make approx 16.1hh
Fabulous yearling filly bred as a serious dressage prospect. Mature enough to show in hand this season.
From a superb dam line that has produced many top German dressage horses and breeding stock. Her dam Cover Girl is a half sister to leading young sire Connery and from the direct mother line of Elite stallion Consul.
Her sire Festivo is a graded son of the Grand prix stallion Fidermark, a leading Westphalen sire, and son of the legendary Florestan.
Although she has such a strong dressage pedigree, she is half sister to a number of exciting young eventers and her amazing canter and natural athelticism and boldness could see her successful in this sphere.
BEF Premium winner as a foal. Has developed into a striking yearling with a superb hind quarter, very correct conformation and outstanding temperament.
Using these two pictures http://good-times.webshots.com/photo/2999997210061358009wZGiKn and http://good-times.webshots.com/photo/2968952710061358009wqhLtj
and this is the text I was going to send
Heading: VOLATIS COSMOPOLITAN
Breeding: Sire Festivo (Westphalen) (By Fidermark x Flin Flon)
Dam Cover Girl (Trakehner) (By Guter Stern x Caro-Dame)
2007 Bay filly to make approx 16.1hh
Fabulous yearling filly bred as a serious dressage prospect. Mature enough to show in hand this season.
From a superb dam line that has produced many top German dressage horses and breeding stock. Her dam Cover Girl is a half sister to leading young sire Connery and from the direct mother line of Elite stallion Consul.
Her sire Festivo is a graded son of the Grand prix stallion Fidermark, a leading Westphalen sire, and son of the legendary Florestan.
Although she has such a strong dressage pedigree, she is half sister to a number of exciting young eventers and her amazing canter and natural athelticism and boldness could see her successful in this sphere.
BEF Premium winner as a foal. Has developed into a striking yearling with a superb hind quarter, very correct conformation and outstanding temperament.
