advice on advert please

[jo1]

After my post the other night about my mare, have decided to take the plunge and advertise her. Would really appreciate any advice on the advert, Thanks

Stunning 15.3, 4 year old brght bay mare, Registered Welsh Section D x TB. Fantastic paces and great attitude to work. Good with farm machinery and cars but not been on roads yet. Professionally backed and being slowly brought on. Has been rode in both English and Western saddles, full snaffle mouth. Passport, microchipped and fully vaccinated. Owned just over a year, lots of potential in all areas but new work commitements forces sale. Price includes rugs and tack. Not novice ride – experiance needed. 5* home more important than price

 

[Bossanova]

Best to not write any negatives and only put in the essentials- I'd rather put something like this :

15.3hh 4yr TB x Welsh D mare. Very attractive with 3 smart paces and a very willing attitude. Professionally backed and carefully produced- working very nicely and will go far with a continuing education.
Good home a must for this sweet horse, no novices please.
Sad sale due to work commitments. No vices, ifs or buts. £...... Including tack and rugs

 

[jo1]

thanx for that hun - just wasnt sure how much info to put it. Have done it now - cant believe shes up for sale