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TinselRider

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I have Lord advertised on several sites and have had numerous views on his ads but no one has contacted me yet
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would someone be kind enough to look over my add for me please?
 
will put description on here,
Lord is a 17hh bubbly young warmblood (in his 5th year) with FANTASTIC breeding (including puissance champion szaser, furioso) he has fantastic paces and has a huge amount of scope too. Lord has established all his basic flatwork although he is green he works in a beautifull relaxed outline, he has a good natural jump and doesn't get strong or silly into a fence, will jump fillers, water, couloured poles etc. Lord has been hacked out alone and in company and has seen traffic including double decker buses, motorbikes, vans etc. He is a very affectionate chap and will follow you about in the field all day.

Lord is only for sale due to the fact I do not have the time to produce him due to work commitments.

Please bare in mind that Lord is green and therefore NOT suitable for a novice or inexperienced rider. He has so much talent too offer to the right person, he could go on to showjump / dressage or event, please no timewasters, novices or joyriders as this is a heartbreaking sale of a stunning young gent. More photos can be emailed.

Sale includes some rugs / tack. Open to offers!! I just want a good home for this lovely horse.
 
I'd put up a price, or at least an indication. Personally if I look at ads and there's no price or idea or price range, I won't enquire...it just puts me off completely.
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I would guess its the price- he does sound lovely but these days, people are not willing to part with £5500 on a horse that is green, not suitable for a novice, has no competition history at all etc etc etc...(not saying I necessarily agree but that seems to be how the market is at the moment). People just aren't willing to pay bucks for potential or good breeding...

Hope I haven't offended, not my intention, just how I see the market at the moment.
Personally I would drop the price and take out the open to offers bit....
 
I think your photos could be better, the jumping one is fab, but try to get a nice flat work picture and a good conformation shot.

I think your ad could read a bit better, it isn't bad but you could sell him more and make it an easier read.

In his fifth year is a slightly unclear way of stating his age, I guess you mean that he turns five this spring/summer, but it could be interpreted to mean he is four.

Whereabouts are you, I'm looking for a horse at the moment, he's a bit over my budget but if you are open to offers.....
 
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