Help with my ad

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Morrigan_Lady

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Please dont shout at me for advertising, coz Im not!!

I just need to know if this sounds ok, coz Im struggling to find the right wording!!

RIDING OPPORTUNTY

Are you looking for some thing sane and sensible to hack out a couple of times a week?

I have a 16.3hh gelding looking for some one to ride and enjoy him.
If you are just looking for a nice hack during the week or at weekend, please give me a call.
No jobs or money required, just riding for a friendly reliable adult.

We are based in ........... and have some lovely hacking and people to ride out with.
 
The word something and someone are whole words, not two separate words.

It sounds like a sensibly worded advert to me.
 
I think that sounds fine to be honest, though I have never written an ad!

You have not stated why the rider is needed though? If it were me, I would like to know, i,e lack of time or whatever. As I think it sounds more genuine that way -

Also, I might also put some more info on the horse down. Such as what breed, type, etc


And lastly I might state what type of hacking it is? And what type of rider you are looking for... As you may get some freeloaders, or someone totally unsuitable who have been on a days pony trekking. Is the hacking out just walk and trot? Will the horse hack alone?


But that's just me asking those things as i am pretty nosy! Sounds like a fab deal though, someone will be lucky - where are you?
xx
 
You might want to put something down about how experienced you want the rider to be otherwise you may get a total novice turn up (which may or may not be ok depending on your horse!). Otherwise sounds like a lovely opportunity for someone.
 
Morrigan_Lady said:
Please dont shout at me for advertising, coz Im not!!

I just need to know if this sounds ok, coz Im struggling to find the right wording!!

RIDING OPPORTUNTY

Are you looking for something sane and sensible to hack out a couple of times a week?

I have a 16.3hh TBx gelding looking for someone experienced to ride and enjoy him.
If you are just looking for a nice hack during the week or at weekend, please give me a call.
No jobs or money required, just riding for a friendly reliable adult.

We are based in ........... and have some lovely hacking and people to ride out with.

Please call 000000000
No texts or Nervous riders please.
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