honest opions on ad please

Cant find the ad
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cant seem to get link right but the ad says.
beautiful hanovarian x trakhener gelding, rising 3. passport and vaccs to date. good in all ways, vet ,traffic ,farrier and to load. this horse will make 16hh plus and he has a temprament to die for, he comes to call and loves being fussed with, he is totally unspoilt and will excell in any sphere especially dressage. 1st to see will buy. priced for a quick sale. £1900
 
Not a big fan of the pics. A movement shot would be good. Also what has he done? Is he completly unbroken or has he started lunging etc? Other than that it's nice that he sounds loved
 
Ad is fine, pics are a bit lousy. She'd be better off with one headshot, one good conformation shot taken side on with him standing up properly, and a movement shot of him trotting in the school to show his paces.

Only thing I would say with the ad is maybe make it sound a bit more professional. I'd put something in about his breeding if possible, and make it a little less flowery. There's nothing wrong with it however, and he is a lovely boy.
 
I think words are good except why does she think he will be good at dressage? Is it because of his breeding, if so I would say what it is. Not keen on the photos though, they would put me off viewing
 
Sounds OK but spell 'temperament' correctly - there's nothing worse that bad spelling in an ad. Photos could be better - stand him up correctly in front of a blank wall or with open field behind - take shot sideways on with handler well out in front, out of shot. Perhaps you could get someone to edit a better picture on photoshop. A black border around a pic. enhances it even better.
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