eventing_kid
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it is only a first draft but, i asked for comments so ok i will spell check ang sort out and re post, then tell me what u think!!
Noticed this post and thought it was good!!!
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MizElz
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it is only a first draft but, i asked for comments so ok i will spell check ang sort out and re post, then tell me what u think!!
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thing is, its not just spelling....its content. i can't honestly think of a suitable market for that style of writing - its not telling anybody anything. you need a slant when writing anything biographical; i have started something similar (not to publish, just to get down things before i forget them) but rather than the same old 'trials and tribulations of horses' line, i have tried to put my own spin on it. you need to captivate people! and many people just do not have that ability, in the same way that some can jump a 4 foot course of show jumps picture-perfectly, and others cant!
it is only a first draft but, i asked for comments so ok i will spell check ang sort out and re post, then tell me what u think!!
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thing is, its not just spelling....its content. i can't honestly think of a suitable market for that style of writing - its not telling anybody anything. you need a slant when writing anything biographical; i have started something similar (not to publish, just to get down things before i forget them) but rather than the same old 'trials and tribulations of horses' line, i have tried to put my own spin on it. you need to captivate people! and many people just do not have that ability, in the same way that some can jump a 4 foot course of show jumps picture-perfectly, and others cant!
ruscara
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I was going to be helpful and edit it for you. However, the grammar is just so bad I have decided that I wouldn't know quite where to start! Sorry.
ruscara
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i agree with the spelling. it might just scrape a c at gcse level, but published? forget it!
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If it would merit a 'C' at GCSE, God help us.
i agree with the spelling. it might just scrape a c at gcse level, but published? forget it!
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If it would merit a 'C' at GCSE, God help us.
Rachel_M
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Yes, of course!
Just to give you a little pointer in the right direction, please remember to write your words fully and not to use txt speak. (Such as 'u' for 'you').
You did ask for comments and that is what you are receiving, a fair appraisal of your work from the point of view of a reader. It does not matter whether it is your first or millionth draft, always make sure that your grammar, punctuation and presentation bring across your work to the best of your ability.
Good luck
Just to give you a little pointer in the right direction, please remember to write your words fully and not to use txt speak. (Such as 'u' for 'you').
You did ask for comments and that is what you are receiving, a fair appraisal of your work from the point of view of a reader. It does not matter whether it is your first or millionth draft, always make sure that your grammar, punctuation and presentation bring across your work to the best of your ability.
Good luck
Gonetofrance
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Please, please spare me from text messaging becoming essays and books...................
Poor grammar, punctuation and phrasing hurts my head to read. And sad as I am, it really winds me up when people are too lazy to bother putting capital letters at the start of a sentence, yet can use them to 'shout' when they need to.
EK, writing is not just scribbling down your thoughts as they spill out of your head, it is about structure, and ultimately being readable.
And although I understand dyslexia is a problem with some, if you want to write a book, I'd advise using a spellcheck.
Sorry if this sounds disparaging, but have a read of some of the old fashioned horse books, or even the current easy-to-read authors such as Dick Francis, Jenny Pitman and John Francome. They're not literary geniuses, but I think they're probably closer to where you're aiming!
Poor grammar, punctuation and phrasing hurts my head to read. And sad as I am, it really winds me up when people are too lazy to bother putting capital letters at the start of a sentence, yet can use them to 'shout' when they need to.
EK, writing is not just scribbling down your thoughts as they spill out of your head, it is about structure, and ultimately being readable.
And although I understand dyslexia is a problem with some, if you want to write a book, I'd advise using a spellcheck.
Sorry if this sounds disparaging, but have a read of some of the old fashioned horse books, or even the current easy-to-read authors such as Dick Francis, Jenny Pitman and John Francome. They're not literary geniuses, but I think they're probably closer to where you're aiming!
eventing_kid
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I HAVE EDITED AND RELISTED THE STORY, FOLLOW LINK BELOW TO SEE.
http://www.horseandhound.co.uk/forums/showflat.php/Cat/0/Number/2237344/an/0/page/0#2237344
http://www.horseandhound.co.uk/forums/showflat.php/Cat/0/Number/2237344/an/0/page/0#2237344
htobago
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I'm afraid I have to agree! I don't get it? Is this supposed to be part of a book ? It's just a stream of disjointed, rambling, incoherent thoughts - and even by web-chat standards the grammar is shockingly bad.
OP: I would tell the friend who sent you this not to give up the day job!
OP: I would tell the friend who sent you this not to give up the day job!
Vicki_Krystal
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lol
ok maybe not a c!
i was trying to be kind!!!
maybe a d???
ok maybe not a c!
i was trying to be kind!!!
maybe a d???
Rachel_M
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I do believe the OP is the author.
htobago
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Oh dear! But then why did he/she pretend that a friend had sent it? I'm sorry, but the title of the thread and the first post are very misleading.
Rachel_M
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Agreed. It is almost akin to the posters that join and then say on their first post "I have just found this fantastic new website for horse gear"?..........
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Donkeymad
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Is this, even the edited version, good enough to obtain a GCSE of any grade? (other than fail). Standards have dropped very badly if that is the case.
Maybe, if edited properly, with correct punctuation and grammar, correct spelling and some paragraphs, this might serve as an EpiPrologue to a book, but it is not fodder for a book itself. (In my humble opinion)
Maybe, if edited properly, with correct punctuation and grammar, correct spelling and some paragraphs, this might serve as an EpiPrologue to a book, but it is not fodder for a book itself. (In my humble opinion)
PapaFrita
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Nuala, i have just seen that you are a publisher....would you like to publish me? PLEASE?
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Wow what a cool job! What kind of books do you publish??
Nuala, i have just seen that you are a publisher....would you like to publish me? PLEASE?
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Wow what a cool job! What kind of books do you publish??
ThomasTank
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i agree with the spelling. it might just scrape a c at gcse level, but published? forget it!
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A C
!!!!!!!!!!!!! a C?????????????
Oh my good God, I gained a c in my cse in English. I don't think my spelling or grammar was ever that bad.
What is the world coming to
i agree with the spelling. it might just scrape a c at gcse level, but published? forget it!
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A C
Oh my good God, I gained a c in my cse in English. I don't think my spelling or grammar was ever that bad.
What is the world coming to
Gentle_Warrior
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read one line and got BORED out of my skull.
I personally would be scared of beig laughed at for the thought of getting anywhere with it.
I personally would be scared of beig laughed at for the thought of getting anywhere with it.
TheBlackMoth
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It's a slightly misleading job title. I am a publisher - but I publish newspapers and magaines that are specific to the area I live in!
PapaFrita
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Oh right