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Have just put together my ad for someone to help with Archie. Can you let me know what you think - please be constructive but gentle with me ... I'm poorly
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Longterm COMMITTED MATURE (as in with common sense) ADULT required, minimum once per week, maximum to be discussed.

"I am looking for a COMPETENT, knowledgable ADULT rider to ride and love and fuss my 16.2 hh ID x Cob who in return will look after them, love and fuss in return. Ideally a person who has time on their hands during the daytime, perhaps a mum with children at school who wants to get back in the saddle.

He is a completely safe happy hacker but requires a knowledgeable person as he will try his luck with someone who doesn't know what they are doing (as he has done in the past - plants himself and won't move!). He is not built for speed but for comfor. If speed is your thing then he will be no good for you - he has mainly one speed ... slow, at his own pace, and that suits us both. He does ocassionally perk up but that is usually when he hears me rustling in my pocket for a carrot or mint. He can pop a log in the forest but has not been formally educated over jumps.

He is ridden in a Dr Cooks bitless bridle, usually on the buckle.

Lives out 24/7/365 so no stable duties but poo picking and general care.

Kept at idyllic rural farm location, PO8 postcode, near Clanfield, Horndean, A3 corridor. Transport necessary.

I am an honest person looking for an honest person in return. I have been messed around recently and need commitment so my horse is not messed around anymore. This is a brilliant opportunity for someone who is honest and reliable and who has thought about this seriously and will not give up after a couple of weeks because they have got it out of their system.

Please email me in the first instance".

Also, I hope this is acceptable and I don't get told off by anyone.

xxx
 
Archie sounds lovely, but if I am brutally honest, I would be scared of replying to your advert, in case you thought I was an incompetent time-waster and ate me !

PS. What do you do when he plants and won't move? Ella tried this with me once under saddle - I waited it out, and when she decided that she was ready to move on, i made her carry on standing still in the middle of the yard even longer. She never bothered with that trick again !
 
Oh, Trundle, do I come across as a complete dragon?!
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I made a very big misjudgement about 3 months ago with a girl who talked the talk but couldn't walk the walk. I have been very, very poorly the last few months after my accident and my judgement was poor, to put it mildly.

Archie is my primary concern. He is a competent novice's horse but not a beginners. I shall add that to my advert, I think.

Many thanks

xxx
 
I'd get rid of the 'Just to let you know' paragraph - it seems to be directed to your past sharer, and will put off future ones.
Also, I'd want to know his age, if I were looking for a share horse, and see a picture of him.
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I would have to agree with trudle's reply.

You are going to restrict the amount of interest just purely by the way you have come across, its the horse their sharing not your attitude
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Yes its lovely that you are honest and of course you want to find the right person but you can explain all that over the phone or when someone comes to view him etc, you could just say that, he'd be suited to a confident rider who just enjoys steady hacks as he's not a lively ride etc rather than going into too much detail on the add.

I know you may of had a some messers but your going to get this no matter what, be it loaning/selling or sharing, but surely this is better than only having a few odd people replying?

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Kind of agree that your ad comes accross a wee bit scary. I was after exactly the sort of person that you are for my horse and found one quite easily but I think if you just say someone reliable and competant is required, and I think with mine we worded it that she is 'anybody's ride but no complete beginners please'. She also tends to plant herself and I must admit being slightly apprehensive when sharer started going out alone but they seem to muddle along just fine! Best thing is if you can be there or a trusted fellow livery/friend the first few times and then you'll get a sense of whether the person is all they say they are!
 
Oh, I think I have made a complete hash - Kenzo, I am not looking for a sharer, someone to help me out. I had approximately 60 replies last time I advertised, mostly unsuitable, so thought this time I would say what I want, not save things for telephone conversations or emails to-ing and fro-ing.

If anyone can help with words, please pm me if my advert is really rubbish.
 
Sometimes its easier to find good people by word of mouth, is there anyone you know who might recommend someone suitable rather than having to advertise?

For example, I have always found the best holiday helpers and people to help exercise mine by asking 1/ at our local saddlery where i know the girls well and trust them, 2/ my farrier, he knows all the local timewasters (!!!) and 3/ the owner of the local riding school where i once put one of mine on working livery.

I was just thinking it might reduce the risk of finding someone unsuitable again, hope you find someone nice this time
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You haven't made a hash of it, i think it just needs to be a bit less dragon-like !

Maybe you can talk a bit more about Archie, and a bit less about what the sharer needs to be like - you can do that bit yourself on the phone when they ring up. How about this;

"I am looking for a COMPETENT, knowledgable ADULT rider to ride and love and fuss my x year old 16.2 hh ID x Cob who in return will look after them, love and fuss in return. Ideally a person who has time on their hands during the daytime, perhaps a mum with children at school who wants to get back in the saddle.

He is a completely safe happy hacker but requires a knowledgeable person as he will try his luck with someone who doesn't know what they are doing (as he has done in the past - plants himself and won't move!). He is not built for speed but for comfort. If speed is your thing then he will be no good for you - he has mainly one speed ... slow, at his own pace, and that suits us both. He does ocassionally perk up but that is usually when he hears me rustling in my pocket for a carrot or mint. He can pop a log in the forest but has not been formally educated over jumps.

He is ridden in a Dr Cooks bitless bridle, usually on the buckle.

Lives out 24/7/365 so no stable duties but poo picking and general care.

Kept at idyllic rural farm location, PO8 postcode, near Clanfield, Horndean, A3 corridor. Transport necessary.

Please email me in the first instance".

Basically, everything you said was great, I just deleted the dragony bits and added his age. The fact that the person will need their own transport will put off a few of the kiddies, I think (hopefully!).

if I was near you, and didn't have Ella, i'd definitely get in touch!
 
oh hun, you haven't made a hash of it at all. archie is your everything and a lot of us totally understand that when you're ill things look different, etc. (!). Good on you for thinking of his needs over your own.

T's version of your ad sounds good
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hugs hunny.
 
I think your orignal ad was OK

Nothing wrong with being honest about what you want.

I put a similar post on NR a couple of weeks ago and got the perfect person to ride our little cob

Never actually had to advertise.
 
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He's still sensitive about his age, though?
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The reason I ask is because some folk invite sharers when their youngster proves too much for them...so it's a good point if he's not a 4yr old, I reckon.
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I agree with others - does sound a bit scary but then again you want to deter all the teens! My friend was looking for something to school/hack out on so I'll mention Archie to her if you want. She is on her I think as SharerSarah or something similar!
 
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I agree with others - does sound a bit scary but then again you want to deter all the teens! My friend was looking for something to school/hack out on so I'll mention Archie to her if you want. She is on her I think as SharerSarah or something similar!

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Thanks, hun. Think I have already spoken to her but we both agreed Archie was a little too laid back for her. xxx
 
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