critique my ad please! and where to put it?!

[diggerbez]

does this ad sound ok for a sharer for my horsey?

i know to put it in local tackshops etc but what websites? new rider i know of but what other free ones are there?

Sharer wanted for 15.2 hands TB gelding. Rocky is stabled at a lovely yard in Birtle, Bury with excellent hacking out and full use of all-weather, flood lit ménage. Sharer required for 4 days a week (choice of days negotiable) with a £35 per week contribution required to help cover livery, insurance, feed and shoeing. Rocky enjoys hacking out and there is an opportunity for low- level competing and lessons if wanted. He has competed successfully at all disciplines at RC, but is a little rusty! He is an ex-racehorse and so can be a little sharp (although he does not buck, bolt or rear) so would not be suitable for a novice. Please contact X on 077******** for a chat if interested.

 

[Bowen4Horses]

you're going to get told off for writing menage instead of manege...

maybe you need to highlight his positives a bit more, is he a safe hack? good in traffic?

other than that, fab ad... though i'm not sure i believe your name is X.

good luck!

 

[diggerbez]

oh god...am i offering a menage a trois here?!

and yes my name IS X- it makes my signature a little too easy to forge tho

 

[diggerbez]

how about this?

Sharer wanted for 15.2 hands TB gelding. Rocky is stabled at a lovely yard in Birtle, Bury with excellent hacking out and full use of all-weather, flood lit manege. Sharer required for 4 days a week (choice of days negotiable) with a £35 per week contribution required to help cover livery, insurance, feed and shoeing. Rocky enjoys hacking out and there is an opportunity for low- level competing, fun rides and lessons if wanted. He hacks out alone or in company and is very good on the road. He has competed successfully at all disciplines at RC, but is a little rusty! He is fantastic to handle and catch. He is an ex-racehorse and so can be a little sharp (although he does not buck, bolt or rear) so would not be suitable for a novice. Please contact X on 077******** for a chat if interested.

 

[kateknights]

Sounds very good, i bet you get inundated!
keep us posted
Good luck
Kate x

 

[Rachaelpink]

sounds good to me!

 

[Rachaelpink]

put mine on newrider, preloved, right equine was thinking of stabletalk but not got round to it, possibly local riding schools?

 

[diggerbez]

thanks! forgot about preloved! waiting for stabletalk to email me a link....is being very slow

 

[wendyII]

H&H forums seems like a good place to start LOL!!! You cud get your b**t kicked by admin as they have a no advertising policy........

should have put your number on whilst your at it............ hahahhahahah x

 

[charliesarmy]

Have PM'd you some small alterations but I think make my buddy sound far more positive...

 

[diggerbez]

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H&H forums seems like a good place to start LOL!!! You cud get your b**t kicked by admin as they have a no advertising policy........

should have put your number on whilst your at it............ hahahhahahah x

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sorry?!

was merely asking for help

god this place annoys me at times

 

[wendyII]

hey diggerbez was only teasing.. admins rules not mine........ x

 

[ester]

you'll be posting that a lot as there is a lot of advert advice that goes on here and admin have no problem with it.

 

[somethingorother]

*rolls eyes* Don't appologise diggerbez, about 20 people a day seem to do it, so don't worry about it. It sounds good. You could try horsetoloan.com too, i found my share on there

 

[diggerbez]

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you'll be posting that a lot as there is a lot of advert advice that goes on here and admin have no problem with it.

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thats what i was thinking!

 

[diggerbez]

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*rolls eyes* Don't appologise diggerbez, about 20 people a day seem to do it, so don't worry about it. It sounds good. You could try horsetoloan.com too, i found my share on there

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ooh thanks, not heard of that one!

 

[chickeninabun]

If I were you, go to Google, type in "Horse Loan" or "Horse Share" and see which websites come up then put your ad on those. If I was looking for a share/loan I'd Google it then look through the first half a dozen pages that came up for something I liked.
Hope that helps. Oh and the ad sounds great btw, although you don't say how old he is. Not that's is vital on a share horse but I know I wouldn't want to be riding a 5yo ex-racer, so would prefer to know!

 

[Equestrian92]

Put on www.freeads.net
Lots of loan and shares go on there

Good luck x

 

[aran]

You might want to add what duties you will expect. Are you on DIY or full-livery - ie: are you wanting they to muckout etc, or just ride?

 

[diggerbez]

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If I were you, go to Google, type in "Horse Loan" or "Horse Share" and see which websites come up then put your ad on those. If I was looking for a share/loan I'd Google it then look through the first half a dozen pages that came up for something I liked.
Hope that helps. Oh and the ad sounds great btw, although you don't say how old he is. Not that's is vital on a share horse but I know I wouldn't want to be riding a 5yo ex-racer, so would prefer to know!

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good thinking batman!

oh and certainly seeing what you mean about the age thing, ha ha